The Use of Simple Present Tense : My Bag

Sample 6

 

      My Bag

 

Every woman has a bag. Bag is very important for woman. I also like bag. But  am not collect it. I have one bag which is I like most. This bag is special to me. My mom gives this bag for. Me for my birthday gift. I use this bag to put important things in there.

People use their bag to keep their things. I also do that. I don’t bring my bag to school. I just use it for go window shopping or holiday. Like many others people, I keep my wallet there. Sometimes I keep my cell phone there also. But I often keep it in my jean’s pocket. When I go to mall or supermarket, I put my key bag’s pocket.

My bag color is red. My mother knows that red is one of my favorite color. The bag has two pockets in front. It just a small pocket. I usually use that pocket to keep money or parking ticket. There are also two pockets beside. But I seldom to use it for keeping anything. It is not to safe to keep money or things there.

Many people choose their own bag depend on their needed. They buy a bag for school, use it to work or just bring it like on accessory. Bag is one of an important accessories for woman now. We can find bag in many shapes and colors. And also in a different price.

Because I like my bag, I bring it everywhere I go. Except to school. This bag is simple and doesn’t have many accessories there. I thank to my mom because she buys this bag for me. And sometimes my mom also uses this bag to work.

 

 

1. The Generic Structure

1. Introduction

Every woman has a bag. Bag is very important for woman. I also like bag. But I am not collect it. I have one bag which is I like most. This bag is special to me. My mom gives this bag for me for my birthday gift. I use this bag to put important things in there. (First paragraph)

 

 

 

 

 

The writer starts the introduction with a general idea about the bag as stated in the underlined sentences. The writer introduces the thing to be described by including a detail about the function of the bag.

2. Body

The body of this text contains three parts which are stated in the second, the third, and the fourth paragraph.

	People use their bag to keep their things. I also do that. I don’t bring my bag to school. I just use it for go window shopping or holiday. Like many others people, I keep my wallet there. Sometimes I keep my cell phone there also. But I often keep it in my jean’s pocket. When I go to mall or supermarket, I put my key bag’s pocket. (Second paragraph)

 

 

 

 

There are two ideas presented in the second paragraph, the function of the bag and the pocket that makes the supporting ideas do not focus on one thing. Moreover, the student does the same mistake by using the word people that indicates a general thing, not a specific thing.

	My bag color is red. My mother knows that red is one of my favorite color. The bag has two pockets in front. It just a small pocket. I usually use that pocket to keep money or parking ticket. There are also two pockets beside. But I seldom to use it for keeping anything. It is not to safe to keep money or things there.  (Third paragraph)

 

 

 

 

 

Many people choose their own bag depend on their needed. They buy a bag for school, use it to work or just bring it like on accessory. Bag is one of an important accessories for woman now. We can find bag in many shapes and colors. And also in a different price. (Fourth paragraph)

In the first sentence of the third paragraph, the student describes the color of the bag, but the next sentences describe about the parts of the bag. It means that there are two ideas in a paragraph, but the first idea does not have any supporting ideas. The second idea has some supporting details as seen on the underlined sentences.

 

 

 

Still, in the fourth paragraph, the student uses the word people. The paragraph is also like an introduction, not a body paragraph of the descriptive composition.

 

3. Because I like my bag, I bring it everywhere I go. Except to school. This bag is simple and doesn’t have many accessories there. I thank to my mom because she buys this bag for me. And sometimes my mom also uses this bag to work. (Fifth paragraph)

   Conclusion

 

 

 

It is a simple ending paragraph. It does not conclude the overall ideas about the object described in this composition. The supporting ideas do not match with the main idea of the conclusion.

 

2. Language Features

a.   The Use of Simple Present Tense

The sentence construction of this descriptive composition uses specific tense which is simple present tense. Here are the examples:

-          I use this bag to put important things in there.

-          I usually use that pocket to keep money or parking ticket.

-          There are also two pockets beside.     

      b.  Word choice of sensory words and figurative language

      The student describes the bag with some sensory words such as the shape and the color.

 

Pengelasan Sambungan Tumpul pada Posisi Datar

TEKNIK PENGELASAN

TEKNIK PENGELASAN BUSUR LISTRIK ..
Penanganan Mesin Las Busur Listrik Arus Bolak - Balik

 Pengelasan Sambungan Tumpul pada Posisi Datar

 Tahapan yang perlu dilakukan dan hal-hal penting yang harus diperhatikan meliputi :
1. Periksa dan lakukan pelurusan permukaan material
2. Periksa dan lakukan pelurusan dan siku dari permukaan las.
3. Setel pada kondisi pengelasan (100A, 19.5V).
4. Lakukan las ikat pada sambungan tumpul dengan jarak akar 1mm.

Alat ukur ketebalan Las ikat

Gambar 137 Las ikat sambungan tumpul

5. Setel pra tarik dengan sudut 1o ~ 2o dengan menggunakan meja kerja.
Meja kerja

Gambar 138 Penyetelan pra tarik

6. Letakkan material mendatar diatas meja kerja dan ditumpu dengan plat kecil.
Ganjal bawah

Gambar 139 Posisi material secara mendatar diatas meja kerja

7. Setel pada kondisi pengelasan (110A, 20V).

Gambar 140 Kondisi arus dan tegangan

8. Atur posisi pengelasan yang nyaman. Pegang welding torch dengan metode yang benar dan letakkan torch pada titik awal pengelasan.

Material Torch las Las ikat

Gambar 141 Posisi pengelasan sambungan tumpul pada posisi datar

9. Nyalakan busur pada pada titik awal pengelasan dan lakukan pengelasan lurus maju sepanjang material pada kondisi pengelasan

110 A dan 20 V Torch las

Gambar 142 Penyalaan busur

10. Mundur sekitar 5 mm dari titik akhir pengelasan untuk mencegah kawah las dan matikan busur las
Torch las Bahan

Gambar 143 Mematikan busur las

11. Balik material dan bersihkan garis las
12. Setel pada kondisi pengelasan. (126 A, 20,5 V).
13. Las bagian sebaliknya dengan cara yang sama pada kondisi pengelasan 25 A dan 20,5 V.
14. Bersihkan dan periksa hasil las-lasan. Sikat kawat

Gambar 144 Pembersihan hasil las - lasan

15. Potong material dengan jarak 10 mm dari sisi las.

Garis pemotongan

Gambar 145 Pemotongan hasil las

 

 Pengelasan Sudut Posisi Horisontal..
Pengelasan Sudut Posisi Vertikal

 Selengkapnya tentang Kemajuan Teknologi Pengelasan

Simple Present Tense : My Precious Smash

Sample 5

 

My Precious Smash 

Someone asked me, “What do you prefer, driving a car or riding a motorcycle?” I answered riding a motorcycle. Probably most of people will choose driving a car. A car is more comfortable and prestige than a motorcycle. You don’t have to feel hot when the sun shines or you don’t get wet when rain comes. I agree that cars are more comfortable than motorcycle, but I still prefer to ride a motorcycle. There are a lot of advantages of motorcycle. It is faster, Cheaper, and the most important thing that I don’t have to spend more time in traffic jam. Motorcycles are smaller than cars so we can find space to run away from the traffic.

Even though my father provides me a car at home, I always ride my motorcycle to campus. My blue black Suzuki smash. I take a good care of it, and also was hit by myself. My smash is very convenient and fast. It is 110 cc with blue color on the some parts and also black color on the other side. The police number of it is l 2004 JM some people said that the number is very good and easy to remember

I do many things to take care of my smash and also make it more beautiful. I wash it every week and I also put some stickers on it. There’re stickers of the initial name of my favorite football player, Peter crouch. There are P and C Stickers on left and right side of the smash body. There’s also a Liverpool FC sticker on the black side. Liverpool is my favorite football club. And there’s some bullet stockers on some part of it.

Unfortunately there are also scratches on my precious smash. It has fell twice so far, because I wasn’t carefully on the street. The other good things about my smash are the write light and the seat. It has white light both in the center light and also in the left and right. The seat is also comfortable, because I changed it with the new one. There’s one funny thing about my smash. It is the gas meter. The gas meter is error. On other motorcycle there are E and F, empty and it’s error. But I still love smash because it is fast and also comfortable.

 

1. The Generic Structure

1. Someone asked me, “What do you prefer, driving a car or riding a motorcycle?” I answered riding a motorcycle. Probably most of people will choose driving a car. A car is more comfortable and prestige than a motorcycle. You don’t have to feel hot when the sun shines or you don’t get wet when rain comes. I agree that cars are more comfortable than motorcycle, but I still prefer to ride a motorcycle. There are a lot of advantages of motorcycle. It is faster, Cheaper, and the most important thing that I don’t have to spend more time in traffic jam. Motorcycles are smaller than cars so we can find space to run away from the traffic. (First paragraph)

   Introduction

 

 

 

 

 

From the first beginning paragraph, the writer is like comparing two things and declares it together with the reasons. She compares driving a car and riding motorcycle. Then, she prefers riding motorcycle to driving a car. It is not the identification of the descriptive text. It is like the beginning paragraph of a discussion text.

2. Body

Even though my father provides me a car at home, I always ride my motorcycle to campus. My blue black Suzuki smash. I take a good care of it, and also wash it by myself. My smash is very convenient and fast. It is 110 cc with blue color on the some parts and also black color on the other side. The police number of it is l 2004 JM some people said that the number is very good and easy to remember. (Second paragraph)

The body of this text contains of three parts which are stated in the second, the third and fourth paragraph.

 

 

 

Unfortunately there are also scratches on my precious smash. It has fell twice so far, because I wasn’t carefully on the street. The other good things about my smash are the white light and the seat. It has white light both in the center light and also in the left and right. The seat is also comfortable, because I changed it with the new one. There’s one funny thing about my smash. It is the gas meter. The gas meter is error. On other motorcycle there are E and F, empty and it’s error. But I still love smash because it is fast and also comfortable. (Fourth paragraph)

I do many things to take care of my smash and also make it more beautiful. I wash it every week and I also put some stickers on it. There’re stickers of the initial name of my favorite football player, Peter crouch. There are P and C Stickers on left and right side of the smash body. There’s also a Liverpool FC sticker on the black side. Liverpool is my favorite football club. And there’s some bullet stockers on some part of it. (Third paragraph)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The ideas of the second, the third, and the fourth paragraph are mixed. From the underlined black sentences, the writer states the same idea about what she does to take care of her motorcycle. While in the italic sentences, the writer describes the specific appearances of the motorcycle. Those ideas mentioned should be put together accordance with each same main idea to be better read and stay focus in coherence.

Moreover, in the fourth paragraph, there is a contrast. It is showed by the red colored sentences. On the first sentence, she says that there are scratches on her motorcycle which indicates the bad thing. Yet, on the second sentence, she tells the other good things about it.

      In conclusion, we can see that there is no main idea in each paragraph which can be described by supporting details.  So, the body paragraphs are not well arranged.

 

3. Conclusion

There is no conclusion paragraph included in this composition.

 

2. Language Features

a. The Use of Simple Present Tense

The sentence construction of this descriptive composition uses specific tense which is simple present tense. Here are the examples:

- You don’t have to feel hot when the sun shines or you don’t get wet when rain comes.

- I agree that cars are more comfortable than motorcycle, but I still prefer to ride a motorcycle.

- My smash is very convenient and fast.

      Nevertheless, the writer uses past tense in the introduction and some parts of the body of the descriptive composition. (Someone asked me, “What do you prefer, driving a car or riding a motorcycle?” I answered riding a motorcycle)

      b. Word choice of sensory words and figurative language

            The student uses some sensory words in describing the appearance of motorcycle, such as the color and the parts of the motorcycle.

 

 

Introduction : Body : Conclusion : My Bi – bi

Sample 7

My Bi – bi

 

This year . 2009, Indonesia is introduced to BlackBerry, as we know Black Berry has a short name, BB. BB has so many type. From curve, Javelin, Bold, Strom, Tour and the one Gemini. The price is also different. As I know, Bold is around 5 Million Rupiahs, Curve is not produced anymore, Javelin is about 4 Million Rupiahs, Gemini is about 2 – 3 Million Rupiahs and it is cheapest one, for Strom and Tour I don’t know about the princes.

Well, mine is Bold, my brother bought it just 4,1 Million Rupiahs, because it’s the second hand. The ex – owner bought it and did not know how to use it and then he sold it. Not, It is mine. I love my bibi very much, Bibi is my BB’s name, I call it like that. For the provider, I use Axis. It’s really cheap; I just spend 100.000 Rupiahs for a month for BB’s activation. I can connect to the internet for a month and I can use BB Messenger, It uses for chat to the other BB’s owners.

My Bibi appearance is still good, no scratch, the track ball is still white, it wears black silicon and I have another silicon at home, blue and yellow. I put a screen guard on it too and my screen guard can used as a mirror. No one van take a look to what I look on my screen because the screen guard also protects my screen from spies. It is cool ! The silicon spent 150.000 Rupiahs and the screen spent 50.000 Rupiahs. Those things made me spent a lot of money. My friends have the funny name for this condition. They call it “ Kan.Ker”as known as” Kantong – Kering”.

Now I want to talk about the function of BB. It has 2 MP for the camera, 8 GB for the external memory, Push email, Connect to Facebook, my space, or Twitter, Check the weather, Chat to the other BB’s owners, And etc. Push email is very useful, You do not have to open your computer and connect to the net for check your email, every time you’ve got the new email, you can open it at your BB. Connect to Facebook is Useful too, You do not have to waiting for the long loading look like when you open from your computer or cell phone, Chat to the other BB’s owners is to wait like send messages like from cell phone.

Wow! BB has so many Functions. As long as we can use it for the good purposes. Every people can be addicted to BB if they don’t know to separate their time between works and learn how to use BB. So, don’t you want to use BB?

 

 

1. The Generic Structure

1. This year  2009, Indonesia is introduced to BlackBerry, as we know Black Berry has a short name, BB. BB has so many type. From curve, Javelin, Bold, Strom, Tour and the one Gemini. The price is also different. As I know, Bold is around 5 Million rupiahs, Curve is not produced anymore, Javelin is about 4 Million rupiahs, Gemini is about 2 – 3 million rupiahs and it is cheapest one, for Strom and Tour I don’t know about the princes. (First paragraph)

   Introduction

 

 

 

The student misses the introduction of descriptive composition. The introduction is like a report composition. She mentions the facts related to Blackberry. Every sentence stated is general things of it, such as the types and the prices of Blackberry.  

2. Well, mine is Bold, my brother bought it just 4,1 million rupiahs, because it’s the second hand. The ex – owner bought it and did not know how to use it and then he sold it. Not, It is mine. I love my bibi very much, Bibi is my BB’s name, I call it like that. For the provider, I use Axis. It’s really cheap; I just spend 100.000 Rupiahs for a month for BB’s activation. I can connect to the internet for a month and I can use BB Messenger, It uses for chat to the other BB’s owners. (Second paragraph)

   Body

 

 

 

 

 

      There are three ideas presented in the second paragraph, how the student gets her Blackberry, the provider used, and the function of it. Actually, the first idea is such retelling the history of getting her blackberry developed in two sentences. This paragraph is not well-arranged.

My Bibi appearance is still good, no scratch, the track ball is still white, it wears black silicon and I have another silicon at home, blue and yellow. I put a screen guard on it too and my screen guard can used as a mirror. No one can take a look to what I look on my screen because the screen guard also protects my screen from spies. It is cool ! The silicon spent 150.000 rupiahs and the screen spent 50.000 rupiahs. Those things made me spent a lot of money. My friends have the funny name for this condition. They call it “ Kan-Ker”as known as” Kantong – Kering”.  (Third paragraph)

 

 

 

 

There are also some ideas presented in the third paragraph, the appearance of her Blackberry and the price of the supporting accessories she uses. Moreover, the ideas are not completed with suitable supporting ideas.

 

 

Now I want to talk about the function of BB. It has 2 MP for the camera, 8 GB for the external memory, push email, connect to Facebook, my space, or Twitter, check the weather, chat to the other BB’s owners, and etc. Push email is very useful, you do not have to open your computer and connect to the net for check your email, every time you’ve got the new email, you can open it at your BB. Connect to Facebook is useful too, You do not have to waiting for the long loading look like when you open from your computer or cell phone, chat to the other BB’s owners is to wait like send messages like from cell phone. (Fourth paragraph)

           

 

 

 

            The fourth paragraph is about the function of the Blackberry. It is an idea as the main idea and well-constructed with suitable supporting details.

3. Wow! BB has so many Functions. As long as we can use it for the good purposes. Every people can be addicted to BB if they don’t know to separate their time between works and learn how to use BB. So, don’t you want to use BB? (Fifth paragraph)

   Conclusion

 

 

 

The writer misses an ending (conclusion). It is such a hortatory composition. It can be seen from the last sentence of the paragraph as the recommendation which is usually used in the hortatory composition.

 

2. Language Features

a.   The Use of SimplePresent Tense

The sentence construction of this descriptive composition uses specific tense which is simple present tense. Here are the examples:

-          I just spend 100.000 rupiahs for a month for BB’s activation.

-          I can connect to the internet for a month

-          I can use BB Messenger

      Nevertheless, the writer uses past tense in the body of the descriptive composition, such as in the second paragraph and the third paragraph.

-          my brother bought it just 4,1 million rupiahs, because it’s the second hand. The ex – owner bought it and did not know how to use it and then he sold it.

-          The silicon spent 150.000 rupiahs and the screen spent 50.000 rupiahs. Those things made me spent a lot of money.

     

      b.  Word choice of sensory words and figurative language

      The student just uses a sensory word, the color.