The Use of Simple Present Tense : My Bag

Sample 6

My Bag

Every woman has a bag. Bag is very important for woman. I also like bag. But am not collect it. I have one bag which is I like most. This bag is special to me. My mom gives this bag for. Me for my birthday gift. I use this bag to put important things in there.

People use their bag to keep their things. I also do that. I don’t bring my bag to school. I just use it for go window shopping or holiday. Like many others people, I keep my wallet there. Sometimes I keep my cell phone there also. But I often keep it in my jean’s pocket. When I go to mall or supermarket, I put my key bag’s pocket.

My bag color is red. My mother knows that red is one of my favorite color. The bag has two pockets in front. It just a small pocket. I usually use that pocket to keep money or parking ticket. There are also two pockets beside. But I seldom to use it for keeping anything. It is not to safe to keep money or things there.

Many people choose their own bag depend on their needed. They buy a bag for school, use it to work or just bring it like on accessory. Bag is one of an important accessories for woman now. We can find bag in many shapes and colors. And also in a different price.

Because I like my bag, I bring it everywhere I go. Except to school. This bag is simple and doesn’t have many accessories there. I thank to my mom because she buys this bag for me. And sometimes my mom also uses this bag to work.

The Generic Structure

Introduction

Every woman has a bag. Bag is very important for woman. I also like bag. But I am not collect it. I have one bag which is I like most. This bag is special to me. My mom gives this bag for me for my birthday gift. I use this bag to put important things in there. (First paragraph)

The writer starts the introduction with a general idea about the bag as stated in the underlined sentences. The writer introduces the thing to be described by including a detail about the function of the bag.

Body

The body of this text contains three parts which are stated in the second, the third, and the fourth paragraph.

People use their bag to keep their things. I also do that. I don’t bring my bag to school. I just use it for go window shopping or holiday. Like many others people, I keep my wallet there. Sometimes I keep my cell phone there also. But I often keep it in my jean’s pocket. When I go to mall or supermarket, I put my key bag’s pocket. (Second paragraph)

There are two ideas presented in the second paragraph, the function of the bag and the pocket that makes the supporting ideas do not focus on one thing. Moreover, the student does the same mistake by using the word people that indicates a general thing, not a specific thing.

(Third paragraph)

Many people choose their own bag depend on their needed. They buy a bag for school, use it to work or just bring it like on accessory. Bag is one of an important accessories for woman now. We can find bag in many shapes and colors. And also in a different price. (Fourth paragraph)

In the first sentence of the third paragraph, the student describes the color of the bag, but the next sentences describe about the parts of the bag. It means that there are two ideas in a paragraph, but the first idea does not have any supporting ideas. The second idea has some supporting details as seen on the underlined sentences.

Still, in the fourth paragraph, the student uses the word people. The paragraph is also like an introduction, not a body paragraph of the descriptive composition.

Conclusion

It is a simple ending paragraph. It does not conclude the overall ideas about the object described in this composition. The supporting ideas do not match with the main idea of the conclusion.